Class 3 have been studying how authors use their vocabulary choices to create action packed sequences that grab the reader. We used these strategies in our own writing. Here is a fantastic example of an action sequence written by Isabella McCormack in Y4.
Astrid ran up to the volcano. The larva pools around here started to vibrate. Out of nowhere came the hideous scaled nightmare. Astrid's heart skipped a beat. Cautiously, she reached for her sword. Suddenly she was surrounded by flames. How could she ever slay the beast now?
Nimbly, she just managed to leap over the blazing flares. At that very moment the murderer lashed out a vicious claw at her; she leapt backwards and charged at the hideous creature. The monster pounced elegantly. Astrid leapt; her sword facing downward. The beast moved. She landed with a thud on the ground. She lay there unconscious on the boiling floor.
Wednesday 24 October 2012
More Killer Chillers!
X-mas Killer
Francesca Taylor-Draper Y4
It's Xmas Eve and Tommy (my brother) ran downstairs. He saw a sinister lurking creature. In the glint of the lights he saw a gun. Tommy didn't know what to do; he tried to move but he couldn't. He was shivering all over than the brute turned around ....
Rainstorm
Bobby Page Y4
Jack and Tom were waiting for their mum. It had been ten minutes already and they were getting bored. It started raining so they decided to run home. They were nearly home when they saw a house with an open door. They went inside and they were never, ever seen again.
The Ghost House
Harry Stratford Y3
The children opened the door to the house. The cobwebs on the ceiling and creaky floor should have told them to leave but they needed to know the truth. In a second, the house went completely dark - then suddenly the ghost screamed, "Get out of here". So it was true.
By the River Bank
Daisy Pennells Y3
I am alone by a dark bleak river bank. Thick swirling fog makes gruesome figures dance and stretch eerily. Trees creak, twigs crackle, every sound is chilling. Suddenly I hear a blood curdling scream. Whipping my head around, a haunting desperate whisper hangs about my ears. Petrified, I turned and ran!
Francesca Taylor-Draper Y4
It's Xmas Eve and Tommy (my brother) ran downstairs. He saw a sinister lurking creature. In the glint of the lights he saw a gun. Tommy didn't know what to do; he tried to move but he couldn't. He was shivering all over than the brute turned around ....
Rainstorm
Bobby Page Y4
Jack and Tom were waiting for their mum. It had been ten minutes already and they were getting bored. It started raining so they decided to run home. They were nearly home when they saw a house with an open door. They went inside and they were never, ever seen again.
The Ghost House
Harry Stratford Y3
The children opened the door to the house. The cobwebs on the ceiling and creaky floor should have told them to leave but they needed to know the truth. In a second, the house went completely dark - then suddenly the ghost screamed, "Get out of here". So it was true.
By the River Bank
Daisy Pennells Y3
I am alone by a dark bleak river bank. Thick swirling fog makes gruesome figures dance and stretch eerily. Trees creak, twigs crackle, every sound is chilling. Suddenly I hear a blood curdling scream. Whipping my head around, a haunting desperate whisper hangs about my ears. Petrified, I turned and ran!
Killer Chiller 50!
Could you create a chilling story in not more than 50 words? That was the challenge for Class 3. They had to make sure that every word was chosen for maximum impact. With only fifty words to use they couldn't afford to waste a single one!
My Toy Story
Mika Jakeman- Johnson Y3
I was lying in bed trying to get to sleep. It was dark and foggy. Suddenly my toy cars started to switch on lights and engines. Larva slushed out of the rocket lamp. The puppet spoke to the slithering snake. Tigers and cheetahs padded across my quilt. The floorboards creaked ....
The Beast
Thalia Patel Y4
The beast snarled threateningly in the dead of night in the deserted town hall; three horror-struck children were cornered. Nowhere to go, nowhere to hide. Just them, the beast and death. If only they had listened to mum was the last thought they had. The beast launched. He exists.
The End
Byron Capitano Y4
Menacingly, the shrieking laughter pounded into Jimmy's ears. A shadowy image approached him slowly. A gentle breeze brushed his cheek and Jimmy knew it was close. As quick as lightning, he tugged the duvet over his head and tried to stop his trembling legs. A horrifying scream left Jimmy's mouth .....
The Tunnel
Eva Bedford Y4
The train entered a long dark tunnel. Millie could feel warm stale breath on her cheek and could sense a figure looming in front of her ominously close. There were flashes of purple light in the carriage and a scratching sound from the luggage rack. And then ... a piercing scream ....
Escape
Ruby Warrior Y4
The blood chilling scream filled the dark, cold air. Shivers raced down my back like a fingernail scratching as I stumbled through graves. Shadows scrambled among the trees as the scream cried out again, this time louder. I raced towards the gate, heart pounding as from nowhere the figure approached.
My Toy Story
Mika Jakeman- Johnson Y3
I was lying in bed trying to get to sleep. It was dark and foggy. Suddenly my toy cars started to switch on lights and engines. Larva slushed out of the rocket lamp. The puppet spoke to the slithering snake. Tigers and cheetahs padded across my quilt. The floorboards creaked ....
The Beast
Thalia Patel Y4
The beast snarled threateningly in the dead of night in the deserted town hall; three horror-struck children were cornered. Nowhere to go, nowhere to hide. Just them, the beast and death. If only they had listened to mum was the last thought they had. The beast launched. He exists.
The End
Byron Capitano Y4
Menacingly, the shrieking laughter pounded into Jimmy's ears. A shadowy image approached him slowly. A gentle breeze brushed his cheek and Jimmy knew it was close. As quick as lightning, he tugged the duvet over his head and tried to stop his trembling legs. A horrifying scream left Jimmy's mouth .....
The Tunnel
Eva Bedford Y4
The train entered a long dark tunnel. Millie could feel warm stale breath on her cheek and could sense a figure looming in front of her ominously close. There were flashes of purple light in the carriage and a scratching sound from the luggage rack. And then ... a piercing scream ....
Escape
Ruby Warrior Y4
The blood chilling scream filled the dark, cold air. Shivers raced down my back like a fingernail scratching as I stumbled through graves. Shadows scrambled among the trees as the scream cried out again, this time louder. I raced towards the gate, heart pounding as from nowhere the figure approached.
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