Ptolemy Procter Year 2
Once upon a time there was a girl called Dorothy and she had a dog called Toto. She lived on a farm and her uncle was called Uncle Henry and her auntie was called Aunite Em. There was a tornado. "What's happening Toto the house is moving!" She landed in the land of Oz and the Good Witch said "You have killed the Wicked Witch of the West."
Dorothy followed the yellow brick road and soon she saw a scarecrow. "Where are you going?"
"To the Emerald City."
Then they met the Tin Man"Can you help me?" said the Tin Man
What's wrong? said Dorothy
"I will go rusty in this rain. I need a heart" said the Tin Man.
Then they met a lion. "Put em up"
Soon the friends came to the Emerald City.Everything was made of emeralds. First they crossed the field of poppies, then they followed the yellow brick road to the castle. They met the Wizard. They asked the Wizard to help them. "I need a heart "said the Tin man.
"I need some courage" said the Lion
"I need a brain" said the Scarecrow.
"What about me?" said Dorothy
"You!" said the Wizard" I will help you if you kill the Wicked Witch"
Arun Panesar Year 2
Once upon a time there was a girl called Dorothy and she had a dog called Toto and her Auntie and Uncle were working. She lived on a farm and just then the house started to move.
"What's happening?" said Dorothy "Where are we going to land?"
Dorothy and Toto followed the yellow brick road. On the way she met a scarecrow. The Scarecrow said "Where are you going? Can I come too?"
"I'm going to the Wizard of Oz, yes, you can come"
Soon all the friends came to the Emerald City. They went inside and met a man who led them to the Wizard of Oz. "What do you need?" said the Wizard
"I need a brain" said the Scarecrow.
"I need a heart" said the Tin Man.
"I need some courage"said the Lion.
"What about me?"said Dorothy
"I can't help you" said the Wizard. "I don't know what to do."
Then in a flash the Good Witch appeared and said "you need to click your magic shoes."
Then Dorothy lived happily ever after.
James Jarvis Year 1
Once upon a time there was a little girl called Dorothy. She lived with her Aunite and Uncle. Dorothy was in a farm house with her dog when suddenly a wild wind came and lifted the farm house into the air. When the house landed Dorothy opened the door and got out of the house. A Good Witch said "thank you for killing the Wicked Witch"
So Dorothy and Toto followed the yellow brick road. Soon Dorothy and Toto met a Scarecrow. Soon they mey a Tin Man. Dorothy said "Would you like to come with us?"
"Yes please" they said. After a while they met an angry Lion. "Want to fight?"said the Lion.
Dorothy said "You can come with me to the Emerald City."
So they all set off to the Emerald City together.
Soon the friends came to the Emerald City. Suddenly a man appeared. Dorothy said "Please would you take us to see the Wizard of Oz?"
The little man said "this way to the Wizard of Oz."
The Wizard said "you must kill the Wicked Witch."
The Wicked Witch asked Dorothy for her ruby slippers. Dorothy would not give her ruby slippers so the witch made Dorothy work in her castle.Dorothy threw a bucket of water over the witch and she shouted "you nasty girl the water is killing me!" Dorothy and Toto lived happily ever after.
These are all very well done it is difficult to condense the whole plot of a book or a film into a few words and manage to capture the essence of what it is all about. Your writing reminded me of the film - I used to watch it every Christmas when I was your age! You remembered all the important things and retold the story extremely well. Very well done all of you and congratulations on getting your work posted here in the Collection .
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